Understanding what a Letter of Intent is and when to use them is a bit confusing. But basically, this letter just means you are serious about continuing towards a purchase and that you want the other party to stop entertaining other offers. Our Letter of Intent template is suitable for all states.
In the bad example, Jean is too vague, and has a few red flags, like suggesting that her last job didn't end well, and making an inappropriate joke about Scorpios to gloss it over. You can tell people you're great, but it's better to prove it by offering specifics, like she does in the better example. In the second example, Jean's letter body is more clearly organized, and makes sure to give the most relevant details about her career so far.